10 March On March 10, 2018 By Drink.Wine.Today.In diary, haiku, poetry, today, writing on the wall outside the birdseed shimmers in rain. fragile, tender – life. Share this:TwitterFacebookLike Loading... Related
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I love the imagery of the first two lines, but the third line lets me down, I think. It’s a bit too saccharine, too maudlin, for my tastes, ‘saying’ what, perhaps, might be better ‘shown’. LikeLike November 27, 2018 at 9:05 pm Reply
Haiku Three Six Five. 
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#Haiku Happenings #2: Drink.More.Wine.’s latest haiku!
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I love the imagery of the first two lines, but the third line lets me down, I think. It’s a bit too saccharine, too maudlin, for my tastes, ‘saying’ what, perhaps, might be better ‘shown’.
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